Zanryu's Pixels

[Zanryu]

(02-22-2017, 02:42 AM)Swift_Assassin Wrote: Well, technically this page is called Zanryu's Pixels. And as far as I know, text on computers are made of pixels so it counts.

Well, outside of it only seeming to be a snippet of a larger story, I don't really see anything wrong with it. But, then again, I'm not exactly the best at this sort of thing. My english and language classes were usually some of my worst classes, explaining a lot of my issues during rps with grading. Too impatient sometimes. Perhaps having a bit more to it would give more for a person to critique. Then again, you could end up making it overwhelming and not actually get critique like you want. Like with me and my sprites

Hope you can get the critique your looking for.

I appreciate you taking a look all the same! I actually had a friend over last night who found something worth noting that I also wasn't 100% sold on when writing (kind of stumbled over the paragraph trying to get through it), so I'm looking at reworking a few sentences later.