Some days after the incident...
In Castle Pherae, a messenger hurried to deliver the news of the incident to the marquess. He arrived in his lord's study breathless, and quickly handed the man a piece of folded parchment. Frowning, he read it quickly, and then again a second time. He sighed, his expression grim. "Thank you, lad. Dismissed." The boy-messenger quietly took his leave, bowing as he backed away. The marquess looked from the windows of his study down into the spacious courtyard gardens, where his youngest son and daughter were playing.
"I wish things had stayed as simple as they were," he muttered to himself, barely audible. His long red hair was worn to shoulder length, and he had grown a short, red beard. He walked to his door as he reminisced, opened it, and to one of the guards outside, said, "Summon Generals Lucian and Trott. I require them immediately."
An hour later, with afternoon tea poured and the two generals with him, he began laying out his plans for them. "Essentially, groups of ten to twenty of our men riding from homestead to homestead, looking for and imprisoning brigands and deserters."
"A bold plan," Trott said, a touch of hesitance in his otherwise mild voice. "But it would not be agreeable to have our competitors capture said bands. We'd beggar the march just to have your own army returned to your command, my lord."
Lucian revealed nothing of his thoughts, but the marquess could guess them easily enough. He was slightly more in favor of the plan than his counterpart.
"If these dastards think they can run all over my lands and abuse my subjects, I will throw them onto my people's swords. I will not let them come to harm because I wanted a little extra security at home," the Marquess replied. "Besides, Pherae is next to Bern, Tania, Santaruz, and the sea. None of these sources have been serious enemies in the last hundred years, so assuming we keep an eye on them from the border keeps, there shouldn't be a problem."
Trott looked somewhat apprehensive, but Lucian nodded, standing. "I will ready the horses and the men to leave on the morrow."
The marquess nodded at the man, dismissing him. He returned his gaze to General Trott and stared at the man until, at last, he looked away. "Your will be done, Lord Elbert. I will go and prepare my troops."
"Thank you, old friend. I know it's not an easy request to make of you, but I promise, the effort won't go to waste," Elbert IV of Pherae replied, smiling wearily. "My cousin, Lord of Ostia, should think that we're at least tamping down on the mages in the area, though I doubt such a move will be well liked by our neighbors. Still, it must be done. I can only hope things don't go awry."
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My Notes
This is my first time reviewing an RP, if you all want individual comments, I can and will write them to you if you PM me about it.
So, this was highly amusing. I loved all the references to FE7. The Kani Matti's introduction made me laugh the first time I read it, but I gotta congratulate you, Toogee. Glass II played himself up as a swordsman, so I was genuinely surprised by that twist in the middle there. Good job.
On the whole... what a mess. I guess I missed what Orica was doing in the village, and Shad's whole reason for stopping by was a whim. I think I missed Kal-in's intro post, too, and Neil's. Frankly, Toogee put together a well-thought out reason for being there, and I liked that. Shad's observation of an empty school was a bit saddening, and at first I thought it was supposed to be a bookshop. Wasn't aware schools were much of a thing back in the day. Then again, bookshops in random villages weren't much of a thing either. In any case, nice villifying of the Empire there.
I want to say, the five of you managed to pull off the whole 'strangers brought together by a common enemy' 'ragtag bunch of misfits' thing really, really well. Each one seemed fairly stable (except for Kalin), prone to falling back on their habits and pasts, and their interactions felt real (At least, when they interacted and didn't just retcon their replies >.>) They also didn't just automatically agree like mindless drones, they had their own opinions on which options would best work.
The only thing remotely I found did not help the experience were all of Kalin's non-sequitur moments. Particularly jarring was the HP thing when the Meteor spell hit her. How the hell would she know what those were? Or how they pertain to her? It would also be appreciated if she actually said the words 'By the way' instead of using BTW in her dialogue. Kalin herself, as a character, was pretty fairly amusing, and her interactions with her pegasus (is it going to remain nameless?) were refreshing. Kind of reminds me of a character that mine interacted with in an RP here a while ago, only ditzier. Much, much ditzier.
The conclusion was satisfying, though I must admit, it's kind of sad to see such a hammy villain go out so soon. I guess it's just the legacy of Glass; do too much with it, and it will break. Or alternatively, hit Glass with weapons, and it shatters. Ba-dum tss!
In Castle Pherae, a messenger hurried to deliver the news of the incident to the marquess. He arrived in his lord's study breathless, and quickly handed the man a piece of folded parchment. Frowning, he read it quickly, and then again a second time. He sighed, his expression grim. "Thank you, lad. Dismissed." The boy-messenger quietly took his leave, bowing as he backed away. The marquess looked from the windows of his study down into the spacious courtyard gardens, where his youngest son and daughter were playing.
"I wish things had stayed as simple as they were," he muttered to himself, barely audible. His long red hair was worn to shoulder length, and he had grown a short, red beard. He walked to his door as he reminisced, opened it, and to one of the guards outside, said, "Summon Generals Lucian and Trott. I require them immediately."
An hour later, with afternoon tea poured and the two generals with him, he began laying out his plans for them. "Essentially, groups of ten to twenty of our men riding from homestead to homestead, looking for and imprisoning brigands and deserters."
"A bold plan," Trott said, a touch of hesitance in his otherwise mild voice. "But it would not be agreeable to have our competitors capture said bands. We'd beggar the march just to have your own army returned to your command, my lord."
Lucian revealed nothing of his thoughts, but the marquess could guess them easily enough. He was slightly more in favor of the plan than his counterpart.
"If these dastards think they can run all over my lands and abuse my subjects, I will throw them onto my people's swords. I will not let them come to harm because I wanted a little extra security at home," the Marquess replied. "Besides, Pherae is next to Bern, Tania, Santaruz, and the sea. None of these sources have been serious enemies in the last hundred years, so assuming we keep an eye on them from the border keeps, there shouldn't be a problem."
Trott looked somewhat apprehensive, but Lucian nodded, standing. "I will ready the horses and the men to leave on the morrow."
The marquess nodded at the man, dismissing him. He returned his gaze to General Trott and stared at the man until, at last, he looked away. "Your will be done, Lord Elbert. I will go and prepare my troops."
"Thank you, old friend. I know it's not an easy request to make of you, but I promise, the effort won't go to waste," Elbert IV of Pherae replied, smiling wearily. "My cousin, Lord of Ostia, should think that we're at least tamping down on the mages in the area, though I doubt such a move will be well liked by our neighbors. Still, it must be done. I can only hope things don't go awry."
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My Notes
This is my first time reviewing an RP, if you all want individual comments, I can and will write them to you if you PM me about it.
So, this was highly amusing. I loved all the references to FE7. The Kani Matti's introduction made me laugh the first time I read it, but I gotta congratulate you, Toogee. Glass II played himself up as a swordsman, so I was genuinely surprised by that twist in the middle there. Good job.
On the whole... what a mess. I guess I missed what Orica was doing in the village, and Shad's whole reason for stopping by was a whim. I think I missed Kal-in's intro post, too, and Neil's. Frankly, Toogee put together a well-thought out reason for being there, and I liked that. Shad's observation of an empty school was a bit saddening, and at first I thought it was supposed to be a bookshop. Wasn't aware schools were much of a thing back in the day. Then again, bookshops in random villages weren't much of a thing either. In any case, nice villifying of the Empire there.
I want to say, the five of you managed to pull off the whole 'strangers brought together by a common enemy' 'ragtag bunch of misfits' thing really, really well. Each one seemed fairly stable (except for Kalin), prone to falling back on their habits and pasts, and their interactions felt real (At least, when they interacted and didn't just retcon their replies >.>) They also didn't just automatically agree like mindless drones, they had their own opinions on which options would best work.
The only thing remotely I found did not help the experience were all of Kalin's non-sequitur moments. Particularly jarring was the HP thing when the Meteor spell hit her. How the hell would she know what those were? Or how they pertain to her? It would also be appreciated if she actually said the words 'By the way' instead of using BTW in her dialogue. Kalin herself, as a character, was pretty fairly amusing, and her interactions with her pegasus (is it going to remain nameless?) were refreshing. Kind of reminds me of a character that mine interacted with in an RP here a while ago, only ditzier. Much, much ditzier.
The conclusion was satisfying, though I must admit, it's kind of sad to see such a hammy villain go out so soon. I guess it's just the legacy of Glass; do too much with it, and it will break. Or alternatively, hit Glass with weapons, and it shatters. Ba-dum tss!
Thank you Destin, for the awesome mug of Ambrose.